Deadpool!- the audition!

[Deadpool2th]

Sunday morning, for a chance it was quiet in the centre of New York. Kids were playing with eachother in the streets, sun was shining, hell, even birds were singing. To be short a perfect day. Ofcourse this has to be a little too perfect, since loud cracking noises were heard in the background.

The Rhino was stomping through the streets, beeing chased by Deadpool. The thing was smashing cars aside like it was nothing. Deadpool avoided them with much easy, since it wasn't really difficult to tell what his next move would be. He kept on running, untill he noticed the playing kids on the sidewalk. They had seen the Rhino as well, but were frozen by fear and unable to run away.

Wade stopped, standing before a small blonde girl with a pink dress on. She was crying panically. He looked down to her, and walked in the other direction. Several minutes later he came back with a lollypop and handed it over to her. The girl took it, and a smile appeared on her little face.

He then continued his chase, wondering if he would be aible to catch up on his foe. Which he probably would, since writers do love them happy endings

NOTE: I haven't been playing Deadpool for too long, but if you wish I could give you a site where I also play him, to show you my style

[Uatu the Watcher]

It would be beneficial to your acceptation process if you presented these other examples. If you believe it would help, then they can be reviewed as well.

[Deadpool2th]

Well, it's a whole thread with Wolverine. Here's the link. My only problem is that I never talk too much in my starting posts....

Link to the thread

endingxmen.proboards84.com/index.cgi?board=woods&action=display&thread=1177491579&page=1

[Uatu the Watcher]

I apologize that it took this long for a decision to be made, but understand, every second was needed. Your audition post here, as well as the other posts on the other link you presented, were all judged; including your writing in several other topics on that board. Overall, the original premises for the first audition post seemed to be lacking the true spirit of Deadpool. Almost reaching it, but falling just short.

This mannerism was mostly noted in other posts. There’s a certain unique finesse to Deadpool, that’s noticed immediately. He always, in one way or another, works his way up to a punch line; continuously building it up as he goes. He never really proceeds about his way without having something comedic to say or do about it; which there wasn’t much of. Most of the jokes were comedic but it didn’t match his boldly crude and psychopathic happy-go-lucky personality. Sublimely, but sometimes out front, he acts as if he knows he’s being watched and viewed as entertainment; by people like you and me. Which brings me to his next infamous technique of breaking the fourth wall in dialog. Though he is mercenary to be taken seriously, the overall essence of Deadpool is that he’s a parody of the superhero; more appropriately an antihero. Lastly, throughout what he does there’s always his personal way of showing exactly the amount seriousness, or lack there of, he holds in what he’s doing. Reading through the audition, there was so much about to be taken advantage of; waiting on a classic Deadpool wisecrack. The obscurity of chasing a man down the street in a giant rhino suit in broad daylight. An innocent girl crying. The reaction of everyone else around them. I was more expecting Deadpool to give the girl a piece of candy, watch her smile, then knock it out of her hands just so he could get a good laugh. Which brings up the lack of Deadpool’s currency based neutrality; swinging from good to bad like a pendulum. There were also a few spelling errors here and there, but they wouldn’t have been a problem if the Deadpool representation had been spot on. You mentioned that you haven’t been playing Deadpool for long, and that’s understandable. I suggest that you spend some more time working on his personality and with time you might just get there. You’re at a good start for now, but it’s a work in progress.

Audition Dennied.

You’re welcome to re-audition for Deadpool, as long as he’s still available, as many times as you like. But, if I may suggest, through reading your style of writing, if I might, there is a character in the Marvel Universe that comes close to what seems to be relatable to what I’ve read. This character seems more reasonable to the type of humor you seem accustomed to, yet more heroic and honest than Deadpool; which was how you seemed to write him. You may want to look into Jennifer Walters. Otherwise known as, She-Hulk.